Thursday, December 29, 2011

Friends


Friends

When you know who
your friends are, the
next question is

where.  You forget
how and why.  What
seems out of place.

Sometimes, though, how
does come to mind.
You remember

that first time love
penetrated,
and you knew this

was no mere nod
you give on the
elevator

to make small talk
between floors, then
get off, back to  

your same safe self
looking for the
next true friend.


          Donnell Hunter
               29 December 2011

3 comments:

  1. It wasn't on the elevator that autumn in 1967, donny. It was a casual question about birds and bird watching. Later came the chicken sandwich in your waste basket.

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  2. I see both you and Nita miss the left turn I took before getting on the elevator. I'm saying it's not like the nod you give to make small talk (give is not gave)that leads to nothing once you are off the elevator. All those lines after "knew this" are a metaphor for keeping most strangers at bay.

    After an encounter like that you keep on looking (maybe even hoping) something genuine will come along.

    Nita dislikes penetrated, but I knew I was risking her concern leaving it in.

    It may be I too caught up with solving the pressure of my intentional form that the poem got into deeper ambiguity than I intended--maybe an eighth type of ambiguity where William Empson has only seven.

    donny

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  3. Yes, missed again. Too focused on the floor plan of the old COB. As you thrice said, "you're not too bad at poetry. Decker is much, much better." And I assume he still is. Maybe the chicken sandwich led me astray though the thoughts of the bird gives my sensitive stomach another turn. I'll watch for verb tenses; Empson should come more easily but perhaps my own 7 types have become too personal. Now, back to that elevator. You know I am claustrophobic . . . .

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